My Romance Writers Weekly crew threw out another Flash Fiction challenge this week, and when I saw the .gif it was based on, I knew I had to give it a shot.
I know, hot right?
The rules were to bring it home in 300 words or less. For once, I followed instructions and ended up at 299! Ha! (No way am I admitting how long it took me to get it under 300 though. 🙂 )
A little teaser before we get started…
The idea came from a real-life experience. Not the kissing (’cause I’m a married gal), but one of the lines in it. See if you can figure out which one…
The band on stage ended their song with a hard punch, and the lights dimmed to blue.
A wild man who’d been drunk-dancing in the dive’s too-packed crowd cheered and threw up both hands, sloshing beer from a nearly full pint in all directions.
Jillian dodged—and crunched on someone’s toes behind her. She spun to apologize and went off kilter.
Big hands caught her at both shoulders. “You all right?”
The hard pecs beneath her palms short-circuited pretty much any kind of activity between her ears and fired all kinds of wonky behavior neck down.
Well, maybe it was the pecs. Could also be her savior’s sky-blue eyes and long blond hair. “I’m sorry about your toes.”
His mouth tilted in a lopsided grin. A wicked affair made more delicious by the darker scruff surrounding full lips. “Got steel-toed boots on, sweetheart. You can dance on ‘em if you want to.”
A new song kicked in. An edgy blues number that twisted the tension between them into something thick and sultry.
Handsome tugged her closer, enough to encourage her hands up and around his neck. “Could just dance with me though.”
The scent of whiskey fluttered across her face. He cupped the back of her neck and nuzzled nose to nose.
Her eyelids slid shut. Every other sense expanded. Waiting. Eager for the brush of his lips. “I’d like that.”
His beard tickled and his breath mingled with hers, warm against her lips. “Gonna have to buy that boy another drink.”
The vibration of his voice, so close and still not close enough, zipped clear to her toes. And then—
Contact.
Sweet, intoxicating contact. Slick and passionate. Tongues and lips tangled in an altogether different kind of dance. The kind to unravel a woman’s mind and send her flying.
And there it is…299, rule-following words. Did you figure out which line was from real life? Take your guess in the comments.
Now it’s time to hand off to J.J. Devine and get my ass back to book three in The Eden Series, Waking Eden.
27 Comments
S. C. Mitchell
September 16, 2014 at 8:31 amOh, this is hot. Very nice.
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 10:27 amThanks, Steve. I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Sarah Hegger
September 16, 2014 at 9:53 amOh, you rocked that (see what I did there *snicker*) Penny would be sending you a gold star
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 10:27 amAren’t you the clever one with the puns. 🙂 I love it when I get gold stars!
Kim Handysides
September 16, 2014 at 12:48 pmIt’s totally got to be the steel toed boots line, right? (swoon) Love it Rhenna.
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 1:51 pmYep! You got it!
Dani Jace
September 16, 2014 at 12:49 pmI love the way you write! My guess: “Gonna have to buy that boy another drink.”
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 1:01 pmAh, thanks Dani! Nope, that’s not it.
Veronica Forand
September 16, 2014 at 1:43 pmA really fun read. The guy is definitely on my hero list.
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 1:51 pmThanks, Veronica!
Brenda Margriet
September 16, 2014 at 2:00 pmI was going to guess the steel-toed boots line, too, but Kim beat me to it. Second guess is “Sorry about your toes.”
Xio Axelrod
September 16, 2014 at 2:03 pmI would guess the same line as Dani, it’s just too good. =) Loved this! Sexytimes.
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 5:17 pmThanks, Xio! And if you didn’t catch it, the line was the steel-toed boots. I actually stumbled onto a guys toes behind me at a dive bar here in Tulsa and when I turned to apologize, that’s the line he used. Such a charmer. 🙂
Beth Carter
September 16, 2014 at 2:09 pmHOT. Well done. My guess: “I’m sorry about your toes.”
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 5:18 pmNope, but you’re close…
CJ Burright
September 16, 2014 at 4:22 pmWhew! That’s some smokin’ hot writing there, girlfriend!
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 5:18 pmThanks, CJ!
J.J. Devine
September 16, 2014 at 4:39 pmMy guess is going to be the stepping on the man’s steel toes 🙂 I’ve done that myself 🙂 Loved your story!!!
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 5:18 pmThanks, JJ!
Gemma Brocato
September 16, 2014 at 6:29 pmI’m with Kim – got to be the steel toes. I’ll tell you – I wanted to kiss that guy. Well done.
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 6:35 pmYep, it’s the boots. That guy was smooth and totally genuine.
Fiona Riplee
September 16, 2014 at 7:36 pmWhat a hot scene! I think the real line is this one: “Got steel-toed boots on, sweetheart. You can dance on ‘em if you want to.”
Rhenna
September 16, 2014 at 7:46 pmExcellent choice, Fiona! You’re right on. And he said it with the nicest smile…
Jo Richardson
September 17, 2014 at 4:47 amWithout cheating and looking at anyone’s answers, I’m gonna go with “sorry about your toes”. LOL cause it just sounds totally cute. LOVED it lady! <3
Rhenna
September 17, 2014 at 7:49 amClose. It’s what he said after about letting me danced on his steel-toed boots.
Mishka Jenkins
September 17, 2014 at 5:37 am‘His mouth tilted in a lopsided grin. A wicked affair made more delicious by the darker scruff surrounding full lips. “Got steel-toed boots on, sweetheart. You can dance on ‘em if you want to.”’ – I was swooning into a puddle after this 😀
Brilliant piece!
Rhenna
September 17, 2014 at 7:49 amOh, lovely, Mishka! I’m glad you enjoyed it. And yes, that’s the line. 🙂